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archet ([personal profile] archet) wrote2006-08-06 07:18 pm
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VigBean drabble

Title: Parting Shot
Series: Question and Answer (1/4)
Author: Archet
Pairing: Viggo/Sean
Rating: PG
Summary: his answer is the always the same.
Disclaimer: this is fiction, for entertainment purposes only and in no way implies anything as to the real lives to the lovely men who are inspirations for these characters.
Feedback: welcomed and appreciated!


~*~


His hands gentle over me, his lips on my neck are hot. His body enfolding mine is sure, solid, and he’s unafraid. I know, because he asks every time, despite knowing my answer. It’s the proper answer, but he’ll ask again eventually, even so.

We’re together whenever we can manage. Despite knowing better, I keep showing, and each morning we play the same parts until . . . now.

His fingers tighten, lips drawing away, and his voice is strained.

“Why?”

I pull away from him, his new question, and the parting cuts me, inside.

“For both our sakes.”

And I walk away.


[identity profile] liars-dance.livejournal.com 2006-08-07 05:00 am (UTC)(link)
Ooh, that hurts - and I want answers too! More pretty please..

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 01:39 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks for reading! More is on the way, though I'm sure how much will be answering anything just yet, ;)
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[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 01:41 am (UTC)(link)
A moment, please, while I molest your icon . . . gorgeous!

Glad you enjoyed this little snip, more is on the way, ;)

[identity profile] jkjules-87.livejournal.com 2006-08-07 07:50 am (UTC)(link)
Intriguing! More on the way, I hope? *cheeky grin*

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 01:42 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks! Yes, there's more coming up, ;)

[identity profile] rotpunkt.livejournal.com 2006-08-07 11:23 am (UTC)(link)
Ouch...! Very sad - buz well done.

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 01:42 am (UTC)(link)
Glad you liked, and thanks for reading! ;)

[identity profile] mooms.livejournal.com 2006-08-07 12:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, so sad. I do like it, though.

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 01:49 am (UTC)(link)
I'm glad you enjoyed, despite the saddness. Thanks for reading! ;)
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[identity profile] ribby.livejournal.com 2006-08-07 01:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, ouch! And now I want to know both what happens next, and what happened before to bring them to this... more, please?

~Kris

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 02:05 am (UTC)(link)
There's more on the way, though it may take a bit before we find out what's come before, and what's about to happen for them. Stubborn, gorgeous boys, can't help but love'em. Thanks for reading! :)

[identity profile] cocoajava.livejournal.com 2006-08-07 02:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Like everyone else, I want to know more about what's going on with them!

So sad, so pretty!

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 01:51 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed, they will be more up a little later, thanks for reading! ;)

[identity profile] brigantine.livejournal.com 2006-08-07 07:49 pm (UTC)(link)
Gah! I don't even know who's saying which, but the thing is, look! See this? this is my lower lip sticking out!

Neat little mention of "him" being unafraid, which implies that the speaker *is* afraid. Oh dear.

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 02:02 am (UTC)(link)
Such a cute pout! *pinch* I was wondering if anyone would comment as to the vagueness of exactly who is saying what.

We'll see if our speaker is willing to move past his fears. I hope so! ;)

[identity profile] helena-s-renn.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 12:56 pm (UTC)(link)
*ouch!*
amazing job you did. just a few words that say it all.

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 01:42 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! So pleased you liked this, thanks for reading! ;)

[identity profile] rifleman-s.livejournal.com 2006-08-08 04:24 pm (UTC)(link)
An intriguing start . . . but many questions . . .

Looking forward to the answers!

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-10 02:41 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed, I'm looking forward to the answers as well, ;)
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[personal profile] makamu 2006-08-11 10:41 am (UTC)(link)
I could not comment on the series before so I will do it now. I love the way the tone of this piece shifts from just being content and leisurely to abrupt confrontation and denial.

Which is also very cleverly reflected in the sentence length (long, leisurely at the beginning to curt and conflicted short passages at the end) and the syntax (the three dots to make the turning point more abrupt).

A very fine piece of work and I hope you will forgive the literary analysis :)

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-11 11:18 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, I appreciate this so much! Thank you for your wonderful, thoughtful feedback! It's always interesting to hear what someone else picked up on, I really don't plan my fics out in detail beforehand, and this series just happened from a sudden idea and just keeps expanding. I hadn't paid much attention to the sentence lengths, until you mentioned it.

Oddly, with each part the length doubles itself, so the fourth installment will probably prove the longest yet. Thank again for you lovely comments, and thank for reading! :)

[identity profile] msdavidwenham.livejournal.com 2006-08-14 01:35 am (UTC)(link)
Oh that had got to hurt. So sad.

[identity profile] archet.livejournal.com 2006-08-14 02:15 am (UTC)(link)
Eee! Your icon is gorgeous! I don't recognize that pic of Sean. ;) Thanks for reading!

[identity profile] msdavidwenham.livejournal.com 2006-08-14 02:27 am (UTC)(link)
I had gotten it from fraoch_icons site. I love that icon of Sean.